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Examples of bad MT lyrics 
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"rich men hold their 5 pound notes out
saves me emptying their coats out
they know i can
tear their throats out"

really..lional bart? "out" 3 times?

and the next verse

"some toff slumming with his valet
bumped in - to me in an alley
now his eyes will never talley.."

you'd have to pronounce it "al aay" and 'tal aay" to make it work.

Bart is usually so good too.

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Post Re: Examples of bad MT lyrics
I agree the second one is particularly bad, but I believe in your first example, the emphasis isn't so much on the "out" part, which is a repeated motif, so much as the "notes"/"coats"/"throats" rhyme.

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which would be fine if verse two did the same..but it doesnt. he's mixing styles and changing rules in the same song.

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I would also point out that in a Cockney/Scouse dialect, "valet" would rhyme more closely with "alley" and "tally" than it appears to our eye.

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and yet most Bill Sykes' sing Valaay....Allay...

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Post Re: Examples of bad MT lyrics
Another Wicked lyric that annoys me:

"Would it be all right by you
If I de-greenify you?"


Wow, what a creative rhyme.


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Post Re: Examples of bad MT lyrics
So many of that song's lyrics are bad in my opinion, mostly as they are completely out of keeping with the already established speech patterns of the character. Not to mention sacrificing normal grammar for rhymes. It would work if the character did it all the time, but it's only really in that song.


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Salome wrote:
"rich men hold their 5 pound notes out
saves me emptying their coats out
they know i can
tear their throats out"

really..lional bart? "out" 3 times?

and the next verse

"some toff slumming with his valet
bumped in - to me in an alley
now his eyes will never talley.."

you'd have to pronounce it "al aay" and 'tal aay" to make it work.

Bart is usually so good too.


Sticking with the same show, how can you justify rhyming 'beautiful' with 'funeral' in "That's Your Funeral"?

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Well, barely anything rhymes with funeral. Lionel kind of shot himself in the foot there.
In the song he also rhymes usual and incurable with funeral. When I was Mr Sowerberry, I never realised it was meant to rhyme at first.

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I dont think he actually meant to rhyme anything with funeral actually..its the words before that make a rhymed couplet.

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"Murder Murder
Once there's one done
Murder Murder
Can't be undone"~Jekyll & Hyde, "Murder Murder"

"All these things you saw in your pajamas
Are a long-range forecast for your farmers"~Joseph...Dreamcoat, "Pharoah's Dream Explained"

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Post Re: Examples of bad MT lyrics
Apples2for10 wrote:
"All these things you saw in your pajamas
Are a long-range forecast for your farmers"~Joseph...Dreamcoat, "Pharoah's Dream Explained"


What's wrong with that? It rhymes, it fits the music, it makes sense, and matches the quirky lyrical style that runs through the whole show.


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